The British sociologist and activist Barbara Wootton once noted as a humorous example of income maldistribution that the elephant that gave rides to children at the Whipsnade Zoo was earning annually exactly what she then earned as director of adult education for London.
that the elephant that gave rides to children at the Whipsnade Zoo was earning
that the elephant, giving rides to children at the Whipsnade Zoo, had been earning
that there was an elephant giving rides to children at the Whipsnade Zoo, and it earned
the elephant that gave rides to children at the Whipsnade Zoo and was earning
the elephant giving rides to children at the Whipsnade Zoo and that it earned
In B, the structure of noted... that the elephant, giving rides ..., had been earning falsely implies that the reader already knows about the elephant--that is, that the existence of this particular elephant is not new information. Also, the past perfect had been improperly places the elephant's earning in the past, prior to Wootton's; consistent verb tense is needed to show that the actions are simultaneous.
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